tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3527790096547842654.post6269477941254161789..comments2023-12-19T09:50:44.504-08:00Comments on Write First, Clean Later: A Publisher, an Agent, and a New NovelL.J. Sellershttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10213491074676394406noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3527790096547842654.post-30401902219197056912009-05-04T11:21:00.000-07:002009-05-04T11:21:00.000-07:00Just have to weigh in on the agent part of this po...Just have to weigh in on the agent part of this post. YES. You need one. Keep querying.<br /> and I have to ask- Is the agent, Kim Whalen? I've pitched her in the past and even gave her an exclusive on a manu she eventually passed on- though I had to chase her down to get the final pass. <br /> I just signed with an agent at Writer's House and he is SOOOOO much more enthusiastic than KW ever was.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11376100534890229940noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3527790096547842654.post-34467280776211482492009-04-24T18:15:00.000-07:002009-04-24T18:15:00.000-07:00ORIGINAL:
Jolie's first hint that today would be w...ORIGINAL:<br />Jolie's first hint that today would be worse than most was missing the homeless vet on the corner of 7th and Washington. She always handed a dollar out the window to the old guy with no teeth as she approached the intersection on her way to work. Sometimes when the light was green, it was tricky, because the person behind her got impatient and honked. But Jolie didn’t care. Giving away the dollar had become a talisman that she hoped would keep more shitty things from happening to her.<br /><br />LINE EDITED:<br />Jolie's first hint that this day would be worse than most came with the absence of the homeless veteran [not veterinarian, right?] on the corner of 7th and Washington. She always handed a dollar out the window to the old guy with no teeth as she approached the intersection on her way to work. Sometimes the person behind her got impatient and honked. But Jolie didn’t care. Giving away the dollar had become a talisman that would keep truly shitty things from happening to her.<br /><br />TRUE REWRITE (less tell, more show):<br />Jolie craned her neck as she sat at the light, looking all around out the window. Where was the homeless guy? Handing the toothless veteran a dollar bill had become a dependable ritual of her morning commute. A talisman of sorts, she looked forward to the exchange--for she considered it an exchange even though she received nothing tangible in return for her payments--as a way of feeling good about herself. Her own personal charitiable cause. And, she supposed, she relished the barest hint of danger that tickled her soul through the two-inch gap presented by her open power-window the same way some people ordered a double esspresso. <br /><br />But today, the bum wasn't here.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3527790096547842654.post-554408941027379502009-04-24T17:40:00.000-07:002009-04-24T17:40:00.000-07:00It's okay but could use a strong line edit.It's okay but could use a strong line edit.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3527790096547842654.post-87767293238541345842009-04-24T12:13:00.000-07:002009-04-24T12:13:00.000-07:00Thanks for all the feedback and support!Thanks for all the feedback and support!L.J. Sellershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10213491074676394406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3527790096547842654.post-89732793299288595292009-04-24T09:18:00.000-07:002009-04-24T09:18:00.000-07:00You're a good writer, LJ, and I know that some sma...You're a good writer, LJ, and I know that some smart agent or editor will jump at the chance to publish your books. Once an editor accepts, it's easy to get an agent. :)<br /><br />Jean<br />http://advicefromeditors.blogspot.com/Jean Henry Meadhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08146960738692672013noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3527790096547842654.post-65899311348890416792009-04-24T07:31:00.000-07:002009-04-24T07:31:00.000-07:00Gets the old brain in gear wondering what's going ...Gets the old brain in gear wondering what's going on. Good start, L.J.Chester Campbellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07155257451021065218noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3527790096547842654.post-7221712516989858562009-04-23T18:00:00.000-07:002009-04-23T18:00:00.000-07:00Made me want to hear more. That's what counts!
G...Made me want to hear more. That's what counts! <br /><br />Good luck with the agent. <br /><br />Mary<br /><br />http://www.cynthiasattic.blogspot.com<br />http://www.woofersclub.blogspot.comMary Cunninghamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04377529303481858837noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3527790096547842654.post-84385800774700813522009-04-23T17:47:00.000-07:002009-04-23T17:47:00.000-07:00Good opening! Understand where you're coming from,...Good opening! Understand where you're coming from, over the years I've had several agents too--finally placed my books myself. Have two small independent publishers.<br /><br />Sure, I'd love to have a good agent, but I'm also happy with where I am. Good luck!<br /><br />Marilyn<br />F. M. MeredithMarilyn Meredith a.k.a. F. M. Meredithhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04179984154939161530noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3527790096547842654.post-81164769112053126782009-04-23T10:50:00.000-07:002009-04-23T10:50:00.000-07:00And I totally know the homeless dude you are talki...And I totally know the homeless dude you are talking about! (I lived in Eugene until 2006.)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3527790096547842654.post-76718067586881270012009-04-23T08:27:00.000-07:002009-04-23T08:27:00.000-07:00a tease, that's what it is! very good indeed!a tease, that's what it is! very good indeed!Paul D Brazillhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12881642426845398389noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3527790096547842654.post-10180537535621394522009-04-23T06:49:00.000-07:002009-04-23T06:49:00.000-07:00Yep. You set me up with two questions. What happen...Yep. You set me up with two questions. What happened to the homeless guy? What shitty things have been happening to her?<br /><br />Actually, three questions. What is going to happen to her now?<br /><br />Helen<br />http://straightfromhel.blogspot.comHelen Gingerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09794759602654727110noreply@blogger.com