Your First Draft Doesn't Have to Suck

I guest blogged today about how to write a great first draft. There's lots of helpful information. Stop in.
Working Stiffs

Why I Put Down a Novel

I start many novels; I finish few. After years of writing, editing, and evaluating works of fiction, I have reader ADD. I read mostly crime/mystery/suspense and some sci-fi, but here’s what makes me put down a book:

• Slow start with too much day-in-the-life detail or too much backstory (I like it when a novel makes me think Oh shit in the first few pages)
• Protagonists who do stupid things (especially before I start to like them)
• Stories that jump back and forth in time for no good reason
• Characters who have cutsie names or are obsessed with their pets (Sorry!)
• Detailed gratuitous graphic violence
• Detailed graphic sex scenes (They’re all gratuitous unless you write erotica)
• Characters who bicker with their siblings or spouses (I’ve seen a lot of this lately!)
• Too many characters introduced in the first few pages with no real explanation of who they are
• Pages and pages with no dialogue
• Protagonists who engage in immoral acts, like harming an innocent person (I need at least one person to root for)
• Long, meandering side stories that take me out of the main plot
• Serial killers (No offense if you write them, I’m just burnt out)

What makes you put down a book?

Easy Effective Edits

I’ve been editing the first draft of my new novel, and I became aware of some changes I consistently make—for the better. I’ll share them here, in case you find them useful.

1. I get rid of the word “it” and replace it with the specific thing that I’m referring to, even if I just named that thing in the previous sentence. “Jackson reached for his Glock. The weapon felt heavy in his hand” is better than “Jackson reached for his Glock. It felt heavy in his hand.” In verbal communication, repetitive use of “it” may be acceptable, but in narrative writing such lack of clarity is ineffective and often confusing.

2. The same is true of overuse of pronouns. So I’ve also consistently replaced “she,” “he,” and “they” with the specific name of the character(s). Sometimes it feels too formal to use the character’s name three times in a paragraph, but if the character, say, a guy named Jack, is talking about the suspect, a guy named Vinnie, then referring to either of these guys as “he” can be confusing to the reader. This is a point that Stephen King makes in his great book On Writing.

3. The third most consistent edit I make is to tweak individual scenes so that they read like mini-stories, with mounting tension, a climax, and a conclusion. The exception to that structure are scenes at the end of chapters, which I often leave with a revelation, a hint of a revelation, or a great deal of uncertainty (aka, cliffhangers).